A time with our grandparents

This week we have had to use our learning from last week and combine it with writing a recount. Last week we learnt how to use adjectives and descriptive language in a story. This week we had to incorporate that into making our recounts interesting.  Our recounts had to be about a time we had spent with our grandparents.

WALT: combine description in our recounts
SC: 5 w's and H
       Using words like; next, then, finally, after that
       Using descriptive words and phrases
       Personal comments
       Beginning, middle and end


Here is Tayla's piece of writing.

Using Adjectives

We have been learning to use interesting adjectives in our descriptions we write. Below is some of the words we came up with for the picture.  We have also included a couple of posts about the windy house.

The windy house

WALT: use interesting adjectives in our story.

The Wind House…

One day Harry, Luke and Ethynn were roaming the land of Nowheresville on their motorbikes eating cupcakes and pancakes. They were driving on a dusty gravel road. The people were very odd. They were acting very weirdly. Suddenly they came to a halt, there was a big and very ugly house. Luke, Harry and Ethynn pulled onto the side of the road and stopped to look at the broken stoney murder house…..

Luke suggested that they should live there. The others said “NO!!”. It was to mouldy and ancient to live in of course. The house was unusually symmetrical. The roof was broken and the windows was shattered. Luke and Ethynn suggested we should go in, but harry jumped loudly in the doorway by the others surprise. Ethynn and Luke only just found out that there was a KEEP OUT sign. We still better go in said Luke. No, Yes, No, Yes fine. But first Ethynn called out to harry to come back, but it was no use…

Luke decided that he would have been killed by a murderer so he called the Nowheresville business fluffy happiness for people murdered. They waited and waited and waited but they didn’t come. Until dawn at least. “We should’ve just gone in” said Luke. “Oh yeeaah” said Ethynn. ‘’But its too cold, dark and scary’’. Said Ethynn. Mmm. agreed Luke.

Written by Luke, Harry E and Ethynn.

The windy house

WALT: use interesting adjectives in our writing

The scary hole

One stormy night it was twelve o’clock and I was walking. I came across a dark mysterious hole in the middle of the empty silent road. Being curious as I am .I took a little peek down the hole I blacked out. I woke in the middle in the middle of no where. THEN… there was a humongous big cro but then I realised that is was  house not just a normal house a grey creepy house which I would of thought was where smugglers keep their treasure. So I then I could smell something in the air it was the smell of mouldy walls. There was cracks all down the walls. The roof was half off and it was slate. The roof was growing moss though I could hardly see anything in the dark it was raining on me and the wind was blowing and my hair was going everywhere. At one moment I heard the ghosts talking to me saying “you will die you will die”

but all I could see was this disgusting ancient little house. It had gold carvings. I felt sorry for the kids who lived there they would of been eating stewed snails and pickled toe nails.

It must be very old and aged I was thinking to myself. I looked around and there was nobody anywhere not even lights from other houses it must be abandoned.  This deathly,rough, and dirty ancient house is broken and ghostly. there was a tree i touched it and it came out and bit my toosh i screamed i just wanted to go home to my family and cat Ting tong and apple juice.

Written by Paige, Lily and Alyssa